What do you think of this story? Would you want to read more? (( Long-ish, so no TL;DR please....))?

I like the way you describe every detail and make the readers feel as if they are experiencing this themselves. and yes, i would LOVE to read more. it simply is alluring. Im writing a book too, so you are an inspiration. I have alot to learn from you. Don't get me wrong, but i think it just needa a little fine-tuning here and there. But you inspired me, and made me believe that i can do better. and please, please, please post more of the story.